"i often talk about my
self"じゃなくて、 "I(iくらいはいいけど) often talk about myself."
マシェリのプロフィールでさえ、 俺でも突っ込みたくてしょうがないくらい不自然。 "Recently, the life
with my dog has been very enjoyable." じゃなくて"Lately I enjoy my life with my
dog." の方が普通外国人では話される。 留学(つーか遊学だろ・・・)してたくせに、 わざとらしい日本人英語しか使えないみたいだな
"I'm thinking of applying into a place that my school is currently
offering, but it seems really hard." ではなくて "I'm thinking ABOUT
applying FOR a POSITION (または to a company) that my school is currently
introducing, but it seems (to be) really hard." じゃねーの?
"I'll do
the best that I can."については "I'll do my best"で十分、わざわざthatを使う必要無し
それともthatごときが使えるのを披露したいのだろうか
"I'm looking forward in meeting a
variety of people." "I'm looking forward TO SEEING a various kind of
people." looking forward inはありえないだろ